Is it right to be strict with little children

[English Guru]

by Слава

Personally, I am for one to be strict with little children. Firstly, if parents do not bring up children in a strict way, kids will forget to be disciplined. Secondly, they may think that they are able to do whatever and whenever they want. Thirdly, kids will always follow special rules of behavior in society and will not start think that they are on the top of the whole world. I am sure this method of upbringing will prevent children from doing bad things.

Nevertheless, there are a lot of people who suppose that if parents want their children to be socially successful and self-confident? They must be kinder and more attentive to their children. The other grown-ups are sure that little children are too sweet to be punished. Of course, parents ought to show warmth towards their offspring. Sometimes they should be strict with them, but they must always remain fair.

In conclusion, psychologists say that there are no problem children, there are only problem parents. Parents shouldn't forget to be wise, loving, considerate and caring. If children feel that the parents love, try to understand them and support, they will improve their behaviour.

[eleda]

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Главный недостаток – несоответствие форматным требованиям ЕГЭ
Вы строите эссе по плану:

1 Мнение автора (нужна строгость) + аргументация
2 Мнение оппонента (НЕ нужна строгость) + аргументация
3 Вывод (нужна мудрость и любовь) {т.е. это не вывод из сказанного, а самостоятельный абзац со своей темой}

Следует изменить план эссе, приведя его к требуемой в ЕГЭ форме -- 5 абзацев (подчеркнутые отсутствуют):

1 ВСТУПЛЕНИЕ (обозначить тему + проблему {parenting/upbringing: strict/authoritative или lenient/permissive/easy-going})
2 Мнение автора (should be strict with kids) + аргументация;
3 Мнение оппонента (should not be strict/should be lenient with kids) + аргументация;
4 Опровержение мнения оппонента;
5 ЗАКЛЮЧЕНИЕ (подтвердить свое мнение, выраженное в п 2)

Добавлено спустя 7 минут 3 секунды:

Personally, I am for one to be strict with little children.

for parents to be strict, но лучше выбрать более нейтральное построение:
In my opinion (или любой другой способ выражения мнения), +
…parents should be strict
…parents should raise (their) children in a strict way

Firstly, if parents do not bring up children in a strict way, kids will forget to be disciplined. Secondly, they may think that they are able to do whatever and whenever they want.

Второе тоже относится к «если не в строгости», тогда его можно присоединить какой-нибудь связкой типа Moreover/What is more/Furthermore,/Also,/etc, чтобы отделить от следующего пункта, который, как я понимаю, касается уже другой ситуации -- когда ребенка строго воспитывают:

Thirdly, kids will always follow special rules of behavior in society and

Но, чтобы уж совсем снять возможность двусмысленности, лучше подчеркнуть:
Secondly, …
…being brought up/raised
…kids brought up/raised
………. in a strict way
………. with strict discipline
………. by strict parents
(they) will always follow ???special rules of behaviour in society

follow ???special rules of behaviour in society

Какие special правила имеются в виду – особые (т.е. только для них установленные?) Желательно выбрать менее двусмысленное слово или просто:
follow THE rules of behaviour in society

will not start think–

start thinking

I am sure this method of upbringing

-- это не совсем метод, хотя в разговоре так можно сказать, но ведь у нас эссе; это скорее
type or style of parenting OR
this parenting style, но еще лучше вместо не очень определенного this method/type/style of upbringing, написать конкретнее:

strict upbringning
strict parenting
strict child-rasing
firm/strict discipline

will prevent children from doing bad things.

bad things – это очень слабая лексика, начальный уровень, да и звучит по-детски.

(help) prevent them from
…….from (inappropriate or) antisocial behaviour(s)
…… from wrongdoing
such as taking drugs or breaking the law

Nevertheless, there are a lot of people who suppose that if parents want their children to be socially successful and self-confident? They must be kinder and more attentive to their children. The other grown-ups are sure that little children are too sweet to be punished. Of course, parents ought to show warmth towards their offspring.

Всю эту часть можно свести к одному предложению по сути: есть те, кто считает, что нужно применять другую модель воспитания. И еще здесь есть пол-аргумента: потому-что дети будут socially successful and self-confident (это не доказано, так как сторониики строгости тоже считают, что их воспитание именно для того, чтобы дети были успешны)
Хорошо бы подумать о более сильных аргументах противника (в этом абзаце их нужно 1-2:. Четко сформулировать его позицию и дать 1-2 четких аргумента (здесь как-то не видно четкости -- про все сразу: и sweet (??), и справедливость, и даже строгость, которой в этом абзаце делать нечего.)
self-confident – не то слов, вероятно, вы хотите сказать confident

and self-confident? They must be kinder and more attentive to their children.

– пунктуацию поправьте

kinder, more attentive

– не те слова. Строгий родитель ведь тоже часто добр и уж почти наверняка внимателен, строгость следует противопоставлять не доброте, а нестрогости, т.е. lenient/easy-going/permissive/indulgent/nondirective child-raising /upbringing/parenting
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The other grown-ups are sure that little children are too sweet to be punished.

Other
Можно не выделять здесь одних и других .

are too sweet to be punished

– sweet не понятно здесь; хорошо бы найти более существенный аргумент в пользу «мягкого» воспитания
Например, можно от противного:

при строгом воспитании могут ухудшиться отношения с родителями,
могут возникнуть психологич проблемы (неврозы, агрессия, депрессия);
могут начать врать или вести себя хорошо только в присутсвии взрослых

Можно напрямую:
при мягком воспитании дети больше доверяют родителям, более confident и т д.

In conclusion, psychologists say that there are no problem children, there are only problem parents. Parents shouldn't forget to be wise, loving, considerate and caring. If children feel that the parents love, try to understand them and support, they will improve their behaviour.

Если ваше мнение было за строгость, то будет ошибкой в выводе вдруг начать писать о мудрости и любви. Надо четко повторить свое мнение, а уже потом можете добавить, про мудрость и проч.

Parents shouldn't

сокращениям бой!

[sumerrella]

Здравствуйте, проверьте пожалуйста.
Тема: It’s not right to be strict with little children.

Many people think that they should raise their children in severity. Others argue that it is unnecessary.

As for me, I strongly agree with this statement for many reasons.

Firstly, such strong measures can destroy the psyche of a young child, and in the future, they will lead to the trust issues with other people.

Secondly, the children that were brought up in severity would like to become more independent in their maturity and would like to try something that his or her parents forbade him to do. Such bad experience as drug dependency and alcohol addiction can lead to tragic consequences.

Opponents argue that if people are severe with their children, it will help them to keep the perfect discipline.

I would object saying that, every conflict can be resolved in a peaceful way therefore, the child can understand an explanation of his mistakes and he or she will try to do not repeat them again.

To sum up, I would like to say that the education of the child depends on his or her parents’ beliefs, but the most important thing is not to harm you kids.

[English Guru]

sumerrella, смотрите структуру эссе по абзацам!

his or her parents forbade him to do.

them to do

every conflict can be resolved in a peaceful way therefore, the child can

Ожидается точка после way.
...every conflict can be resolved in a peaceful way. Therefore, a child can...

therefore, the child can

a child - мы же пишем абстрактно

he or she will try to do not repeat them again.

he or she will try not to repeat them again.

that the education of the child

a child

important thing is not to harm you kids.

one's kids.

[Marina133]

Bringing up children is an essential and crucial thing in our world. Therefore, all parents have their own view on methods of raising kids. Some of them prefer to be strict and some of them do not.
I personally believe that people should rise kids in severe atmosphere. First of all, it is good for their future character. If parents let do everything what children want, in the end they grow up selfish and unpleasant. Secondly, a child tries to learn faster, be polite with adults and and other children when a parent teach him roughly. Moreover, I know a lot of stories when a kid who grew up in family with no borders became disrespectful to his parents and left them alone in old ages.

However, there is another opinion. Firstly, the opponents claim that being rough with children will make them sad or behave the same with their friends. Furthermore, people on the opposite side claim that being strict is bad for little child’s mental health because it supposes shouting.
That may be true but I cannot agree with this point of view. If a parent is severe it does not mean that he is evil and angry. He still gives love to his child and that is what really matters.

To conclude, I want to add that it is not only right to raise children in strictness but also very important because in this case they will grow not selfish, civilize and with manners.

[English Guru]

Marina133, сделайте абзацы более понятными

If parents let do everything what children want

that children want

when a parent teach him roughly

teaches

a kid who grew up in family

a family

little child’s mental health

a little child’s mental health

a parent is severe it does not mean that he

he or she

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