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[Efimova]

learning forieng languages.
It is well-known fact, that foreing languages play a great role in our modern world. So learning languages has become popular among people. But some people doubte the benefit of it. I would like to express my opinion on this situation.
Of course, I am consider it necessary to learn foreing languages. To start with it is a great opportunity to learn more about cultures of others countries. Consequently, it expands our minds and makes us well-rounded. Also people who knows forieng languages can find hight-paid job and make a great career. For instance, they can work abroad. Moreover, learning languages makes people more intelligent, educated and attractive. It develops our member and brain.
However, there are people, who believe that learning foreign languages is the waste of time. Firstly, they think it needs a lot of time and instead of learning they would prefer entertain with friend, walk and "enjoy" life. Secondly, they consider it reqiue cash cost.
Actually, I would not support this point of view. I am sure it is just lazy people. There are a lot of methods and exercises, which help fastly and freely improve your knowleges.
In conclusion, i would say that there are a lot of opinions on this problem. But I am strongly sure learning foreing languages must become an integral part of everybody's life.

[English Guru]

Добрый день!

Тема какая? Мне нужна тема, чтобы перенести в правильный раздел или создать новый.

P.S. Ошибок много...

[Efimova]

Тема: learning forieng languages.
Буду очень благодарна, если укажете на них)

[Efimova]

English Guru, Тема: learning forieng languages.
Буду очень благодарна, если укажете на них)

[English Guru]

Efimova, у Вас очень большое терпение, а значит, и стремление. Похвально!

Поехали...

It is well-known fact

a well-known fact - требуется артикль, т.к. fact исчисляемое существительное

foreing

foreign

doubte

doubt

I am consider it necessary to learn foreing languages

I consider it necessary... - Present Simple, глагол consider
foreign

To start with it is a great

To start with, - требуется запятая после вводной фразы

Also people

Используйте более сложную лексику, например Moreover, people...
Moreover, = In addition, = Furthermore,

people who knows forieng languages

people who know - множественное число

can find hight-paid job

a highly paid job - снова артикль с исчисляемым существительным

It develops our member

Что вы имеете в виду?

would prefer entertain

would prefer to spend time - после would prefer ставим to + infinitive
entertain - не очень подходит

entertain with friend

with a friend или with friends

it reqiue cash cost.

It requires money, насколько я понял.

it is just lazy people

they are just

improve your knowleges

knowlege - в 99% случаях употребляется в единственном числе. В российском ЕГЭ это 100%

Оценю очень приблизительно, уже ночь....
-1 балл за решение коммуникативной задачи
-1 балл за отсутствие / неправильное употребление linking words
-3 балла за грамматику
-2 балла за лексику
-1 балл за орфографию и пунктуацию

ИТОГ: 6/14 Я уверен, Ваше упорство приведёт вас к более высокому результату!

[Efimova]

English Guru, искренне признательна я буду стараться!

[English Guru]

Efimova, есть вопросы?

[Efimova]

English Guru, нет, спасибо большое)

[Efimova]

English Guru, сочинения обязательно добавлять по темам? Или я могу оставить его здесь, например, в комментариях?

[English Guru]

Efimova, по темам - обязательно! Или создать новую тему, если такого эссе нет на форуме (бывает редко).