Some people think that extreme sports help to build character. Эссе

[Ivan the Great.]

There are a lot of sports nowadays. Some of them are more extreme, while others are not. But is it really so, that extreme sports help to build character? Let’s discuss this issue.

In my opinion, any extreme or not extreme sport helps people to improve themselves and to build a strong character. Firstly, there are too many things which influence on a person who does sport: bad weather, fear and extreme exertions etc. Secondly, such sport experiences help people to become more decisive and confident. Thirdly, every sportsman understands that, risk is an essential part of the extreme sport and if a person wants to become successful he needs to discard his fears and go forward.

But there are some few people, who think differently. Firstly, they argue that the extreme sport is very dangerous and it is useless. Moreover, they think that the extreme sports can’t temper the character and it is all up to a person.

I'm categorically disagree with this position,it cannot go further than being an immature claim. Sometimes sport is really dangerous, but sport is a kind of a thing that help everyone to become stronger, to find themselves in their lives. Nevertheless, all the problems in the lives of people that are related to sports, become forgotten exactly when they see the results of their efforts.

To summarize, I want to say that the sport helps people to find themselves, develop abilities that are hidden in them and to improve day-to-day.
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[English Guru]

But is it really so, that extreme

запятая перед that не нужна

which influence on a person who does sport

influence a person

understands that, risk is an essential part of the extreme

лишняя запятая перед risk

if a person wants to become successful he needs to discard his fears and go forward.

he or she needs
his or her fears

I'm categorically disagree

I categorically disagree или completely

that the sport helps

sport

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[Ivan the Great.]

Большущее спасибо за проверку!
Думал, что никогда не дождусь :)
Скоро отправлю еще пару эссе из моих работ!

[English Guru]

Вижу, только вы создаёте новые темы, а нужно писать в старых!

[Chauysha]

The world of sport can change a person in many ways. Let us speculate, if sports help us to build character or it just change the way we look?

In my view, doing sport helps us to become more patient and trains our ability to stay calm in any situation. Firstly, every time during some work out we fight with our laziness and learn how to cope with weak traits. Secondly, if you do sport every day, it becomes your habbit, so you change extremely, both the way you look and the way you feel.

Nevertheless, we can find a contrary point of view. Opponents believe that some exercises or trainings cannot influence on your domectic world and build character because doing sport just make you feel better and help to be at good shape. Also they consider that during the training we work only with muscles.

I completely disagree with this opinion because a man cannot change only in the one way, I suppose. Even if consider that training helps you look better, we can say that this fact makes you more confident and courageous and motivates you to improve your results.

All in all, if you change appearance, you change inside too, and the other way round.

[Ivan the Great.]

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[English Guru]

Ivan the Great., спасибо, сэкономили мне пару минут жизни)))

it just change

they just change

habbit

rabbit and habit have nothing in common (вспомнил нашу университетскую мнемотехнику)

cannot influence on

influence как глагол - без предлога
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/influence_2

doing sport just make you feel

makes ... and helps

to be at good shape

in a good shape - устойчиво
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/shape_1

Even if consider that training helps you

не хватает подлежащего, например we consider

Старайтесь заменять подлежащее YOU на people, one, everybody etc

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[Ainura]

Nowadays, extreme sports are getting more and more popular. The reason is that some people like extreme sports because they want to change themselves; they think that when they do this kind of sport, they become strong and healthy.
I think that extreme sports help us to become confident. Firstly, while you are doing some sports, whatever extreme sports or another, you train your muscles, so you will become healthier.
Secondly, if you do this kind of sport, you can have many emotions, because taking risk is essential feature of extreme sports (that will good affect on your nervous system).
On the other hand, some people say that extreme sports are very dangerous: when you are diving in deep waters, or climbing a mountain, you may harm yourself. Though, negotiating obstacles may help someone to build character, because will power may lessen fears and make us determined. Moreover, opponents suppose that doing this sport is very difficult, and require many efforts and much time.
However, experts say that when we do short-term employment we can get so-called “good stress”, because when we finish this work, we think “I get it” and ours nervous cells restored.
To conclusion, I would say that it is your decision: to do adventure sport or not to do. However, if you want to build a robust body, to be healthy, have strong character, you must choose extreme sports.

[julioyn]

Nowadays more and more people go in for extreme sports. Some people think it helps to develop character, others find them awful and dangerous.

In my opinion, extreme sport is a good way to develop yourself physically and psychologically. Firstly, if you do any of extreme sport, you are often exposed to danger. You have to make yourself to overcome fear and to move forward. Secondly, extreme sport is often a team activity. For example, mountaineering is usually done by a group of people who are depending on each other. So, they have to trust and help each other. Finally, such activities prepare people to get over various disasters.

An opposite opinion is that it does not necessary need to do extreme sports to build character. Some people think there are a lot of other means of personal development, which are safer and more comfortable. For example, reading books or watching films about heroes and their brave actions can help to develop your mind and character.

I cannot agree with this opinion. I am strongly believed that it develops self control. With the help of extreme sport person learns to control his fear. It is really important.

To sum up, building character is a serious work, which demands a lot of tension. I am convinced that extreme sport is a sure way to this goal.

[English Guru]

have to make yourself to overcome

make yourself overcome ... and move...

who are depending on each other.

Глагол depend плохо смотрится в Present Continuous

I am strongly believed

I strongly believe

extreme sport person learns to control his fear.

a person
his or her fear / their fear

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