A person can have only one true friend - Эссе

[natalja]

краткость - сестра таланта. увы мне!

[English Guru]

natalja, у Вас образцовое эссе!)) Вы, наверное, сами преподаёте?))

dwells only between two people.

dwell, безусловно, глагол красивый, но с помощью предлога between не управляется:
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/dwell

when your friend assures to be your side in every emotional crisis

on your side, наверное?
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/side_1

his/her

Я обычно рекомендую писать his or her

in this case, the notion of friendship has been substituted

Запятая не нужна

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[natalja]

большое спасибо!
dwells содрала из аристотеля и ни о чем больше не подумала.
зпт-мое слабое место.
писалось трудно. формулировка тем просто вымораживает: надо дать однозначный ответ на controvercial issue. поэтому рылась в инете в поисках идей. старалась переработать их.
да. я преподаю. прежде чем писать с учениками, пишу сама. поэтому всегда переживаю за качество.

[Maria_Akopian]

Здравствуйте! Я написала сочинение на эту же тему, проверьте его, пожалуйста, тоже. Заранее спасибо!

A person can have only one true friend

There are two opposite opinions about whether or not it is possible to have more than one true friend. Some people think having multiple true friends is natural, while others believe you can have many friends but only one will be true.

In my opinion, a person can have many true friends. First, a friend is someone you have a common sphere of interest with, but people have many interests. Therefore, it’s possible for one to have many true friends. Apart from that, people change throughout their lives and so do their interests, thus leaving some friends behind and opening doors for new ones.

On the other hand, there are people who believe that it’s impossible to maintain multiple true friendships. This is because they require a lot of time and effort which people often can’t provide.

However, I can’t fully agree with this opinion. First, there are some people who are very social. As a result, they are able to keep in close contact with all of their friends. Second, some friendships don’t require constant upkeep. Consequently, they aren’t affected by the small amount of communication.

All in all, even though some people think maintaining multiple friendships is impossible, I believe it is. Maybe just not for everybody.

[natalja]

здравствуйте, мария!
вот мои некоторые соображения.
1. не используйте местоимения you/we. только a person/one/ he or she/people/they/+ соответствующие им притяжательные формы.
2. стиль.
ваше последнее предложение неполное, что недопустимо в официальном стиле, в коем эссе и д б написано. используйте неполные предл в письме. там-то вы уж точно заслужите балл за неформальный стиль.
замечания по стилю относятся и к порядку слов в той его части, где не стоит пропускать союзы who, which, that, прибавляя распространительное придаточное и переставляя предлог за глагол. например:
First, a friend is someone you have a common sphere of interest with. официально это выглядит так: First, a friend is someone with whom you have a common sphere of interest.
насколько я понимаю, вы пишите эссе "личное мнение". с этой т. з. вводная фраза к 3 абзацу неправильная. вы должны ввести противоположное мнение. сюда годятся however, nevertheless, in contrast to this
3. не пишите длинные сложносочиненные предложения. разбивайте их на короткие и четкие простые.
First, a friend is someone you have a common sphere of interest with, but people have MANY interests. лучше:First, a friend is someone you have a common sphere of interest with. However, people have DIFFERENT (это более правильное по смыслу слово) interests.
4. перед союзами which/ who зпт не ставится, если вводимые ими придаточные не являются распространительными, т.е. их можно выбросить и предл не потеряет смысл.
This is because they require a lot of time and effort which people often can’t provide.
здесь именно этот случай, т. е. зпт нужна:
This is because they require a lot of time and effort, which people often can’t provide.
кстати, опять о порядке слов: often следует поставить после первой части составного сказуемого, т. е. после can't.

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продолжение.
четвертый абзац можно вводить словам i cannot but disagree/admit, i cannot help saying
people are social... maybe, people are sociable?
посмотрите на 2 и 4 абзацы. вводя аргументы, используйте разноплановые структуры:
а) first, second...
b)to begin with, then, still, additionally...
думаю, что надо слегка развить последний абзац.
удачи!

[e.ivkov]

There are two opposite opinions about how many true friends can a person have. Some people think that there can be only one true friend at a time, others have an opinion that many can exist.
To my mind a person can have more than one true friend. First, to have a friend you should have a common sphere of interests, and usually people have many. That is why it is possible to have many true friends with whom you share different interests. Second, a person is always changing: taking up new hobbies, visiting new places. Therefore there are a lot of opportunities for new true friend to appear.
On the other hand there are people who are not communicative. That is why it is easier for them to stick to one true friend, whom they know well and share with him secrets and personal emotions.
To a certain extent, it is right, but one should not forget that not communicative people are the minority in our society. Consequently for the majority it is not a problem to have multiple true friends. Even not communicative people can change their true friens if their intersests change.
Taking all the above-given facts into account, I would say, It is possible for nearly everybody to have many true friends. Yet, it does not usually happen, because it does take an effort to find a friend.(232)

[alexstrinda]

насколько я понимаю, вы пишите эссе "личное мнение". с этой т. з. вводная фраза к 3 абзацу неправильная. вы должны ввести противоположное мнение. сюда годятся however, nevertheless, in contrast to this

Точно ли так? Перефразирую, точно ли нельзя использовать выражение:
"On the other hand there are people who ... "

[natalja]

фразы on the one/other hand вводятся 2 противоположных мнения (macmillan, reding/writing), что больше соответствует формату "эссе мнений". в эссе личное мнение надо дать больший контраст своему мнению, что указанные мною слова(источник тот же) + некот другие делают ярче, чем on the...

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Maria_Akopian, мария, посмотрите фразу sphere of interest. maybe, interests?

[alexstrinda]

Спасибо за ответ, хотелось бы детальнее посмотреть источник.

http://www.alleng.ru/d/engl/engl316.htm

Об этом речь?

Если это точно так, то значит надо исправить в "секреты эссе", там это выражение первое в списке в третий параграф. Если я не путаю.

[eleda]

Пунктуацию, орфографию не трогаю – там "-1" (мелочи, но набирается)
Делите на абзацы (пробельной строкой).

about how many true friends can a person have.

== >
... a person can have

have an opinion that

== >
... THE opinion that

to HAVE a friend you should *{HAVE a common sphere of interests}, and *{usually people HAVE many}.

== >too many "haves" for a sentence.
*{HAVE a common sphere of interests} == >
... share common interests (and activities)
Making/Being friends involves/implies/ shared interests, activities, and experiences.
*{usually people HAVE many }.== > Unclear: many what -- Interests? Friends? Carify.

a person is always changing: taking up new hobbies, visiting new places

a person is always changing
то, что вы перечисляете дальше, про другое: изменение обстоятельств, не самих людей.

for new true friend

for A new friend...

there are a lot of opportunities for new true friend to appear.

opportunities for a person to make new friends;

whom they know well and share with him secrets and *{personal emotions}.

повтор share
...trust him or her with their secrets, emotions, or personal matters
... confide their secrets+ to him (or her)

that *{not communicative} people *{are the minority} in our society.

{not communicative} -- unsociable/reserved; shy and reserved
*{are the minority} in our society. –
а) противоречит действительности (стеснительных, замкнутых людей в любом современном обществе очень много, ну просто близится к подавляющему большинству..., какое уж тут майнорити)
б) ...are in the/a minority

Even *{not communicative} people can {change their true *friens} if their *intersests change.

поменять/сменить верных друзей (сменить оного верного на другого верного) -- по смыслу кривовато.
Try: make/find/acquire new friends

[English Guru]

Если это точно так, то значит надо исправить в "секреты эссе", там это выражение первое в списке в третий параграф. Если я не путаю.

Ничего не надо исправлять в моей книге. On the other hand, ... - отличный оборот для третьего абзаца.

Как вы понимаете, на форуме может писать кто угодно. Я рекомендую особенно прислушиваться к мнению пользователей в группах "Администраторы", "Модераторы", "Преподаватели", а также "Native Speakers". Это не значит, что другие пишут неправильно, нужно всегда иметь голову на плечах.

Не забывайте, что мы подстраиваемся под формат ЕГЭ. И пока данный оборот актуален. Только не забывайте ставить после него запятую!

P.S. Извините, не хватает времени проверять все эссе собственноручно!

[katyavan9]

Everyone knows that life without friends is boring. People always want to share their emotions. And some people think that only one person can be your closest friend. Others argue it can be a big number of people who are true friends for you.
To my point of view, there is only one man who you may be best friends with. First of all, a really friend is someone who knows all your pluses and minuses. People who know you for a short period of time can not understand your feelings completly and, of couse, support in difficult situations. Secondly, you can not trust your secrets to a large group of people. It is dangerous because the information can leak. This situation can't happen if you have one close friend. Thirdly, best friend is a person who really appreciates you. He is willing to do for you all you need.
However, there are people believe everyone needs a lot of friends. They are sure sometimes there is so much troubles that two people can't cope with it. In a large company it is easily to solve problems.
Personally, I can't agree with this opinion. The real help you can provide only one who knows and understands everything that happens to you.
In conclusion I would like to say that it will be many people in your life you will have fun with. But not every one of these people will be near at any moment.

[English Guru]

a really friend

real

Thirdly, best friend is a person who really appreciates you. He is willing to do for you all you need.

Странное утверждение

However, there are people believe everyone needs a lot of friends.

people who believe that everyone

there is so much troubles

so much trouble

it is easily to solve problems.

easy / easier

it will be many people in your life

there will be

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-1 балл за лексику
-1 балл за грамматику

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[alise]

Many people consider friendship to be the most important relationship they have. Some of them share the closest relationships with more than one person, others seem to be happy with only one true friend. Who is right? Let us speculate and see what stands behind it.

In my opinion, it is possible to have more than one true friend. Firstly, any person usually has too many interests for another person to coincide with them. So it is much more interesting to have two or more friends and share one's different interests. Secondly, those people who have siblings and good relationships in a family have more than one true friend by circumstances. Moreover, reject in being a best friend to a person only because one already has a true friend is offensive and hurts that person's feelings.

However, some people do not consider more that one of their friends as a best friend. They believe that sharing friendship with lots of people makes their relationships superficial and empty.

I do not agree with the last statement. By being a lover, a classmate, a daughter or a son and a sister or a brother one does already have more than one best friend. And every bond of friendship is unique and significant. One should not be afraid to have more friends.

To sum it up, I should say that there have always been two opposite opinions on the question of friendship. What we really need to know is that we must value our friends and be respectful to other people's opinion and one day they may become our friends too.

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[Mustyancev]

За небольшее нарушение структуры тела эссе (2 абзац) что-то сделают?

It's common knowledge that friendship is an important part of our life. Some people think, that you can have only one true friend. However, other people claim that it is not.

In my opinion, this statement is not true, but first of all: What do we mean, when we say a "true friend"? As for me, a "true friend" is a person, who is able to put your own interests ahead of his, a person you can trust unlimited. So, firstly, all our life we meet different people. And a probability to meet a "true friend" is high. Consequently, we are able to have not only one true friend. Secondly, I think that amount of the "true friends" is depends on our wish only. It means, that if you are able to be a "true friend", you will be surrounded by people like you.

On the other hand, some people claim that you can have only one true friend. They think it's so difficult to meet a person, you can trust unlimited in modern world because of low value of moral principles.

I think they are wrong, because people talking such things just afraid to be betrayed. And it's normal. Everyone should decide by yourself, if it is worth it or not.

All things considered, I think that we can have as much true friends as we want. Friends are our second family, solider then first because only we get to choose friends.