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Some people prefer to eat out. However, many people still like to cook meals at home.

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Сообщение nastyakabaeva » 10.02.2014, 22:52

In today’s world people often intend about food place. Many people think that a good food can be made only in domestic conditions, but others do not agree. Other people believe that an amazing food can be provided by people, who work at other places outdoors. Let us consider what the advantages and disadvantages of food at home and outdoors are.

To begin with, every person can choose where to get food himself. In my opinion, delicious and good food can be made with soul. It is possible at home. Firstly, homemade food is always healthier than in the café. For example, every person decides what to use when cooking. But unpredictable things can be containing inside a dish in the café: hair, pollutants, bacteria and so on. Secondly, products, used in cooking, are cheaper, than when ordering food outdoors. As a result, food cooked with his own hands are very valuable, because it is own creation. The brain develops is better because of the human desire to come up with new dishes.

On the other hand, cooking is a hard, painstaking thing. It takes a plenty of energy and person spends a lot of time, because one needs to go shopping, to bring huge bags at home and to cook foods. If you have not a car, it will be difficult to make.

One should, however, not forget that good person is good at everything. If people want to save their organism for a long time and to eat a delicious food, people will make a right choice.

So it’s up to everybody to decide whether to eat out or not. I thing, it is really important where person feeds.
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Сообщение English Guru » 11.02.2014, 01:15

nastyakabaeva писал(а):intend about food place
не совсем понял

nastyakabaeva писал(а):a good food
nastyakabaeva писал(а):an amazing food
nastyakabaeva писал(а):to eat a delicious food
food - неисчисляемое, пища, еда. -> без артикля!

nastyakabaeva писал(а):be provided by people, who work at other places outdoors.
запятой не должно быть

nastyakabaeva писал(а):advantages and disadvantages of food at home and outdoors are
food - это не процесс, это слово неуместно, напишите eating

nastyakabaeva писал(а):But unpredictable things can be containing
contained конечно, ибо пассивный залог

nastyakabaeva писал(а):products, used in cooking, are cheaper, than when ordering food outdoors.
:spy: Готовитесь к ЕГЭ по русскому? Неплохо ставите запятые.... :clap: Пора уже запомнить: products used in cooking are cheaper than when ordering food outdoors :fie:

nastyakabaeva писал(а):food cooked with his own hands
Его руками? Чьими руками? :think: В данном случае так и пишем food cooked with one's own hands

nastyakabaeva писал(а):food cooked with his own hands are very valuable
is valuable, food же единственное число!

nastyakabaeva писал(а):valuable, because it is own creation
Запятой НЕТ! :mad: Почитайте другие эссе, всем уже исправлял! И еще: because it is one's own creation

nastyakabaeva писал(а):The brain develops is better
Предложение не согласовано! The brain develops better?

nastyakabaeva писал(а):It takes a plenty of energy
устойчиво без артикля, plenty of energy

nastyakabaeva писал(а):and person spends
a person

nastyakabaeva писал(а):person spends a lot of time, because one needs
запятая не нужна

nastyakabaeva писал(а):to bring huge bags at home
at home - дома, а bring home - принести домой (без предлога)

nastyakabaeva писал(а):to cook foods.
to cook food / dishes / meals

nastyakabaeva писал(а):If you have not a car
Оййй...странно как-то пишите... If you have no car / if you do not have a car

nastyakabaeva писал(а):that good person
a good person

nastyakabaeva писал(а):it is really important where person feeds.
feed мы говорим только о ребенке и животных, насекомых и прочих - http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/feed_1

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Сообщение nastyakabaeva » 13.02.2014, 23:12

Такие глупые ошибки:((((
про машину я описалась, и про артикли вечно забываю!((
containind тоже не пойму почему написала((
Понравился ваш комментарий про экзамен по русскому) :wink:
сегодня же повторю пунктуацию!)
Спасибо
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Сообщение karina_mia » 24.02.2014, 00:09

Еще одно сичинение на эту же тему by Ildar

Nowadays many people like to eat in restaurants, cafes because it is very comfortable and convenient. However, others believe home-made meal cannot be replaced by restaurant food.

As for me, I like to cook meals at home. To begin with, cooking is my hobby, so spending a few hours in the kitchen brings a lot of satisfaction and enjoyment. Furthermore, meals cooked at home are much tastier and healthier because it is hard to imagine what they put on one’s plate in a café or a restaurant. Finally, eating at home is a much more comfortable and easier for some people who do not get used to visiting cafes frequently.

On the other hand, some people think that preparing food at home takes so much time and thus it is very convenient to go for a meal in a restaurant.

I cannot agree with these people. Even though cooking at home takes a while, it is worth spending time on. Home environment makes the whole process of eating much toastier and warmer because most of the times restaurants are very noisy and crowded. Besides, restaurants are rather expensive, so visiting them frequently will probably cost a huge amount of money.

To sum up, I would say that we should be very careful of what we eat, and the best way to ensure the safety of our health is eating home-made meals.
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Сообщение English Guru » 25.02.2014, 02:35

Ildar писал(а):be replaced by
to replace with - http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/replace

Ildar писал(а):eating at home is a much more comfortable and easier
Артикль: лишний артикль a, либо вы пропустили существительное: eating at home is much more comfortable

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Сообщение IrinaLos » 23.02.2015, 00:20

Nowadays cafes and restaurants are everywhere and a lot of people like to eat there. But other people prefer to stay at home and cook themselves and I am one of them.

I am sure, cooking at home is much better than eating out. Firstly, it is safer. If we eat in a restaurant or café we do not know exactly how the meal has been cooked. We cannot see the cooking process and what products the meal was made of. Secondly, eating at home is cheaper. All we need is to buy ingredients for the dish. Moreover, cooking process is really interesting and exciting. For example, we can mix various ingredients and cook whatever we want.

On the other hand some people claim that eating out is more suitable for busy people who do not have enough time to cook at home.

It makes sense, but usually cooking meal does not take much time. There are many dishes that can be made in half an hour. Furthermore, I think that if a person wants to eat healthy food, he or she must be ready to spend some time on cooking at home. Health is much more important than career or business.

Despite other people’s opinion I am still convinced that eating in restaurants and cafes in not as safe and cheap as it seems. Cooking at home does not need so much time to spend on, besides, it helps to have fun and save money.
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Сообщение English Guru » 07.03.2015, 00:58

IrinaLos писал(а):But other people prefer
However / While

IrinaLos писал(а):If we eat in a restaurant or café
Обычно артикли дублируются in a restaurant or a café
Диакритический знак смотрится особо элегантно :clap:

IrinaLos писал(а):he meal has been cooked.
IrinaLos писал(а):what products the meal was made of.
По временам прыгаете?

IrinaLos писал(а):On the other hand some people claim
Запятая после On the other hand,

IrinaLos писал(а):On the other hand some people claim that eating out is more suitable for busy people who do not have enough time to cook at home.
В эссе не должно быть абзацев, состоящих из одного предложения.

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