Some people think that young people should follow in their parents' footsteps ... Эссе

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make a choice

в данном контексте the choice

a person should opts a kind of profession yourself.

если вставить правильную грамматику, то как-то так:
a person should opt for a kind of profession themselves.

he likes

he or she likes

people do a work which they like

do something they like

they achieve the success

achieve success - устойчиво

career choice affect their lives

affects

are developed difficulty

with difficulty

has right to shoose

the right to choose

When the say

they

So if they err

that choice of profession is a personal decision.

the choice

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[julioyn]

Nowadays there are a lot of opportunities to find a job. Some people believe that a person should follow the advice of his relatives or mates in the matter of choosing profession. Others have another opinion.

In my opinion, a person should choose a profession independently. Firstly, a man must count his personal interests and desires when he determines a future career. In this case, a person should not accept the vision even of the closest human beings. Moreover, if a person chooses the career he or she is fond of, the likelihood of becoming successful and independent is higher because this person will always know what to do and never leave things half done.

An opposite opinion is that friends and relatives are able to help one with profession selection. Close people observe man’s skills and talents. They also could influence on the person’s choice in a good way.

I cannot agree with this opinion. I strongly believe that despite the fact that relatives’ ability to find a person’s strong sides, only a man is responsible for his life and future. Nobody can decide one’s fate.

To sum up, there are various points of view on the problem of career choosing. Personally, I suggest that one has to be free when he or she makes an important decision in life.