в данном контексте the choiceEgarmina писал(а):make a choice
если вставить правильную грамматику, то как-то так:Egarmina писал(а):a person should opts a kind of profession yourself.
a person should opt for a kind of profession themselves.
he or she likesEgarmina писал(а):he likes
do something they likeEgarmina писал(а):people do a work which they like
achieve success - устойчивоEgarmina писал(а):they achieve the success
affectsEgarmina писал(а):career choice affect their lives
with difficultyEgarmina писал(а):are developed difficulty
the right to chooseEgarmina писал(а):has right to shoose
theyEgarmina писал(а):When the say
Egarmina писал(а):So if they err

the choiceEgarmina писал(а):that choice of profession is a personal decision.
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