Эссе C2: Some people think that the best way to keep up with current events is by reading

[tanya3533]

Всем доброго времени суток! Проверьте, пожалуйста, эссе на тему: "Some people think that the best way to keep up with current events is by reading newspapers and watching news programs. Others believe that only the Internet can provide people with impartial assesment of news"

Some people think that newspapers and TV news programs help us to know about current events best of all. At the same time, others consider that the Internet is the fastest way to find out what is happening all over the world.
I agree with the point of view that the Internet is the fastest and the most effective way to find out some news and information. First of all, the Internet provides us with wide range of news resources because billions pf people from all over the world can share with the latest news and information. What is more, , we can use not only resources of your country, but also we can use foreign resources and you can get information very quickly if you know foreign languages well. Besides, you can acces to the Internet everywhere even on the bus or in a cafe.
Nevertheless, we can find a contrary opinion. Some people are sure that newspapers and TV news programs are more responsible for their materials than the Internet resources.
Hovever, I cannot agree with this opinion completely because newspapers and TV resources also not always tell the people the real truth. Telling the truth is not favorable to the authorites nowadays.
To sum it up, I must say that there are different points of view upon this point, but I still stand my ground that the Internet is the most effective way to find out the useful information.
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[English Guru]

provides us with wide range

a wide range

billions pf people

of

can share with the latest news and information.

can share the latest news and information - без предлога

What is more, ,

одна запятая

you can acces to the Internet

access, когда это глагол - без предлога
you can acces the Internet

TV resources also not always tell the people the real truth.

Зачем the people? Напишите без артикля.

Хорошая работа, количество ошибок не превышает допустимое для максимального балла.

[tanya3533]

Благодарю! Большое спасибо за проверку

[Shadow804]

to find out the useful information.

мне кажется, здесь артикль тоже лишний, ведь в общем говорится о полезной информации, а не о какой-то конкретной полезной информации. И в 3-ий абзац я бы еще чего-нибудь добавил, а то мнение/тезис есть, а каких-то конкретных аргументов/обоснований - нет. Например, можно сказать, что информацию в интернет может выкладывать любой желающий, что часто может приводить к неправильному толкованию тех или иных событий да и вообще недопониманию.

[tanya3533]

спасибо, я учту