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**tanya3533** » 13.05.2014, 01:16

Здравствуйте, проверьте, пожалуйста, эссе.

Nowadays, some people may hold the opinion that the best way of rewarding students is giving oral praise to them. Others agree that there are many other better ways to praise the students.
As far as I am concerned I believe that there are many other better ways to praise the students. Firstly, sometimes it is necessary to resort to material stimulation which is the most efficient type of motivation. For example, student will get more desire to developing if parents give them some money or buy them a good laptop for studying. Secondly, one of the best ways to praise the students is to inspire students to learn more. Students should realize that studying and learning is very interesting indeed. Teachers, for example, should give their students lessons in interesting form in order students' ambitions to studying do not exist.
However, some people think that giving oral praise to students is the best way of rewarding them because it is a very efficient motivating factor.
To my mind, it is hard to accept that giving the oral praise to students is the really effective motivating factor. I think that the praise should be based on the students' assessement which is the best way to express teachers' admiration. This way students can make more better results.
To sum up, there are different points of view upon this problem, but I still stand my ground that giving oral praise to students is not such effective way of rewarding students because it is cannnot help them to develope their abilities more.
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**English Guru** » 17.05.2014, 21:20

tanya3533 писал(а):Nowadays, some people may hold the opinion

Запятая не нужна

tanya3533 писал(а):more desire to developing

to develop / for developing

tanya3533 писал(а):studying and learning is very interesting indeed

Строго говоря, нужен глагол множественного числа: are. Но даже так будет не особо хорошо. Я бы убрал лишний синоним.

tanya3533 писал(а):give their students lessons in interesting form

in an interesting form - любое исчисляемое неабстрактное существительное должно иметь артикль.

tanya3533 писал(а):Teachers, for example, should give their students lessons in interesting form in order students' ambitions to studying do not exist.

Статья для Вас: http://englishgu.ru/soyuz-chtoby-v-angliyskom-yazyike-perevod/
Требуется перефразировать и поменять связку: Teachers, for example, should give their students lessons in an interesting form so that the students' ambitions of studying could exist. Если я правильно понял вашу мысль...

tanya3533 писал(а):ambitions to studying

ambition to study / ambitions of studying: http://www.ldoceonline.com/search/?q=ambition

tanya3533 писал(а):giving the oral praise to students is the really effective motivating factor

a really effective motivating factor - описательное определение

tanya3533 писал(а):This way students can make more better results.

Убираем more, глупая ошибка удваивать степень сравнения... :fie:

tanya3533 писал(а):giving oral praise to students is not such effective way of

such an effective way

tanya3533 писал(а):it is cannnot

it cannot

tanya3533 писал(а):develope

develop

-2 балла грамматика (в среднем, у Вас мало ошибок, но эссе 259 слов это слишком много, поэтому по мелочи и набирается).
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ИТОГ: 10/14

P.S. The more we write, the more mistakes we make :wink:

**tanya3533** » 20.05.2014, 11:50

Мда...что-то много ошибок в этот раз...
Спасибо за проверку :smile:

**Gladx** » 03.03.2015, 19:14

Nowadays some people may hold the opinion that oral praise is the best reward for students.Others agree that there are many other better ways to praise the students.
As far as i am concerned , oral praise is a good way to encourage students in their study.Firstly, it might improve studetns self-confidence.Oral praise which is given by the teacher stregthen students' self assessment and also might increase their authority.Secondly, it creates some kind of relationship between teacher and student. Oral praise may be deemed as a little chat which creates friendly atmosphere in the classroom. Thirdly,this type of praise is a very efficient motivating factor. A lot of students would be pleased if teacher praise them personally.
However, naysayers say that oral praise is not the best way to stimulate the students.Moreover, they suppose that the praise should be based on the students assessment because it is a good way to express teachers' admiration.
I can hardly agree with that opinion. Oral praise ,apart from the highest sign of admiration, can be deemed as a sign of understanding which is much more important in our world where everyone grows "alone".
All in all, oral praise is the most effective method to praise the students in any option.

**English Guru** » 07.03.2015, 01:26

Gladx писал(а):i am

I am

Gladx писал(а):Oral praise which is given by the teacher stregthen

Oral praise ..... strengthens

Gladx писал(а):would be pleased if teacher praise them personally.

if a teacher praised them personally. Если уж выбрали второй тип conditionals, то...

Gladx писал(а):naysayers say

масло масляное

Gladx писал(а):on the students assessment

on a student's assessment мб лучше?

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ИТОГ: 13/14 Очень хорошая работа.

**Victoria tlt** » 09.03.2015, 10:33

Разве фраза "oral praise is the most effective method to praise the students in any option" сама по себе является аргументом? Разве это не тезис, который еще надо доказать? Мне всегда казалось, что аргумент должен четко отвечать на вопрос " почему именно так?"

**English Guru** » 09.03.2015, 13:13

Victoria tlt писал(а):Разве фраза "oral praise is the most effective method to praise the students in any option" сама по себе является аргументом?

Эта фраза написана в последнем абзаце, который подытоживает все вышесказанное. Аргументы были выше, поэтому данное заключение звучит хорошо...

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