Childhood is the safest period of human life

[karina_mia]

Эссе C2 на тему: Childhood is the safest period of human life
By Ildar

Some people think that childhood is one of the happiest periods of our lives. However, others believe that children can face a lot of hazardous situations, and sometimes it is impossible to come to the rescue in time.

In my opinion, there are a lot of dangerous situations children can get involved in. Firstly, parents cannot constantly keep an eye on their kids, and thus they will not be able to prevent them from falling, crashing and being injured. Secondly, teenagers can be influenced badly by peers and start drinking and smoking early in order to be accepted and fit in. Finally, kids can be easily kidnapped, and it is rather difficult to reduce the risk of abduction.

On the other hand, some people claim that childhood is the safest time of our lives. In their mind, if children are frequently supervised by an adult and are told about necessary things, their kids will not be involved in accidents.

I cannot agree with these people. Sometimes parents do not even realize that children need to know that there are hazardous situations they might get involved in. Some kids are inattentive and sluggish to make right decisions, and thus in many cases they are likely to end up being hurt or injured.

To sum up, I would say that it is almost impossible to prevent children from being exposed to different dangerous situations, and in many cases nothing can protect them from hazards but themselves.

[English Guru]

and thus they will not be able to prevent them from falling, crashing and being injured

Поскольку это отрицательное предложение (will not), то связка будет не and, а or
from falling, crashing or being injured

there are hazardous situations they might get involved in

Такие обороты уже были! (да, придирка )

Отлично, 14/14

[Elena]

Childhood is the safest period of human life.

Nowadays some people reckon that there is nothing better than childhood. The others maintain the idea that the best moments in life are in maturity. Let us consider who is right.
In my opinion, the most wonderful time that a person has is childhood. Firstly, a child does not have to be responsible for anyone, as his parents do. During this period of life children can lead a rather careless life. Secondly, youngsters are fully supported by their families. So they do not need to think about earning money or finding a job.
On the contrary, some individuals assert that being independent is more important. Thus adults can afford and do anything they want to without being said what is right or wrong.
However, I cannot agree with that because entering an adult life humans receive so many responsibilities and so little time to have fun or to relax. What is more, only in childhood there is someone ready to help and solve your problems.
In conclusion, I would like to admit that every person decide what period of life is better for him. I think that all the children should enjoy the period of life, when their parents completely take care of them.


Проверьте,пожалуйста моё сочинение.

[English Guru]

The others maintain

Обычно пишем others, а не the others.

what period of life is better for him

for him or her - это важно привыкайте писать в обоих родах!

Elena, Елена, сожалею, но Ваше сочинение не по теме. Вам бы поставили 0 баллов, подумайте над заголовком. Где Вы хоть раз сказали о безопасности?

Лексика и грамматика - отлично!

[Elena]

Спасибо. Даа.. не по теме

[vladtheimpaler]

Every human being in the world lived or still lives a childhood. There are two opposite opinions concerning safeness of this life period. Many people think that nothing can bother children. While others claim that childhood is the most dangerous time in people's lives. Who is right?

In my opinion, absolute safety can not be guaranteed even in childhood. Firstly, children are so curious creatures that is why they step in any business they see. For example, there is so common thing when kids put their fingers in sockets there are lots of cases like this after which children become disabled for the rest of their lives. Furthermore, children are the weakness of their parents, kids can be kidnapped by offenders who always ask a big ransom for their relieving, it might sounds unrealistic for ordinary families but it often happens to famous people's families.

On the other hand, there are people who are convinced that nothing can threat children. They say that parental care helps prevent any unwanted case.

I totally disagree with this opinion, parents are not terminators and they can not attent everything their kids do. Also, excessive concern can even trouble kids to become socialized members of society.

In conclusion, i want to say that in my view childhood is more unsafe period than adulthood because human being only starts to explore world.

[Elena]

Childhood is the safest period of human life.

Nowadays some people reckon that only children can be sure in their safety. The others maintain the idea that the safest period of human life is maturity. Let us consider who is right.
In my opinion, childhood cannot be called the safest time of life. Firstly, the most part of youngsters are characterised by being extremely active, undisciplined, and naughty. So, they may harm people around them or even themselves by accident. Secondly, with entering a mature age individuals do less unconsidered deeds, become capable to make right decisions. That is why we come of age only in eighteen years old.
On the contrary, some human beings assure that maturity bring so many dangerous situations. As for children, they are always prevented from doing something thoughtless being under parental protection.
However, I cannot agree with that because there is a great number of cases, when parents were not able to keep an eye on their children fully. As a result, children became injured.
In conclusion, I would like to admit that every person decide what period of life is safer. To my mind, all the parents should try to be more attentive to their children to guarantee a safe life.

Проверьте, пожалуйста.

[English Guru]

vladtheimpaler,

still lives a childhood.

Чего-то не хватает, например предлога. ... still lives in the childhood

children are so curious creatures that is why

there is so common thing when kids

либо ... children are so curious, that is why ..., либо ... children are such curious creatures, that is why ... Во втором случае аналогичная ошибка.

children are so curious creatures that is why they step in any business

Запятая перед that не ставится, но перед that is why - ставится!

For example, there is so common thing when kids put their fingers in sockets there are lots of cases like this

Требуется поставить какой-нибудь знак препинания между sockets и there...

nothing can threat

threaten - глагол.

In conclusion, i want to say that in my view childhood

Запятая после in my view.. Также использовать сразу две вводных конструкции в одном предложении некрасиво!

childhood is more unsafe period

an unsafer period

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Elena,

individuals do less unconsidered deeds

deeds - исчисляемое существительное во множественном числе, поэтому fewer unconsidered deeds

in eighteen years old.

at

assure that maturity bring so many dangerous situations

brings

from doing something thoughtless being under parental protection.

Запятая перед being

a great number of cases, when parents

Нет запятой

I would like to admit that every person decide

decides

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P.S. Странно, что Вы два раза забыли поставить окончание -s

[Elena]

Спасибо))) Буду внимательней!

[tanya3533]

Some people think that childhood is the safest time of their life, others have another point of view. Who is right?

I personally believe that childhood is the safest period of time. To begin with, children are careless at this period because they can do almost everything they want. In addition to this, children seems to be the kindest and the happiest people in the world because they are surrounded by the most attention and care of relatives during this period of time.

But other people consider that the childhood is the unsafest time of human life because children are defenseless creatures and the cannot make their own decisions. For example, they cannot choose the best clothes to wear because they do not know what clothes is better for rainy or sunny weather. That is why, parents make all the important decisions for their children at the beginning of their life.

Despite I respect their opinion, I cannot agree with them. To my mind, any experience comes with time and children should not make important decisions in this period of time.

To sum up, there are different points of view upon this problem but I still stand my ground that the childhood is the safest time in human life because childhood is given to people to enjoy and do what you want during this wonderful time. (226)

Проверьте, пожалуйста

[Olga]

There are two opposite points of view on childhood. Some people are sure that childhood is the safest period of human life. Others, on the contrary, argue that there are many dangers which can harm children.

As for me, I consider that childhood is not as dangerous as other periods of human life. To start with, when you are a child, you do not know what happens in the world, you do not understand that there are many people who can hurt you because our parents try to protect us from everything that have bad reputation. Moreover, when you are a child, our parents always look after us. Sometimes parents even afraid to leave their children alone because they can injure themselves. In addition, when you are a child, you live in an imaginary world where you feel comfort and confidence, and think that you are in safety.

However, many people suppose that childhood is one of the most dangerous periods of our life. For example, child is the most defenseless creature among people because they can not protect themselves. Thus, if children are in extreme situation, for instance, he or she get lost, they can not find their parents without help. In addition, there are many parents who do not take care of their children. In this case, children will not in safety because they can not look after themselves.

But I disaggree with this point of view because if children are in trouble, every person will help them because it is moral duty. If you help this unfamiliar children, someone else will help your child.

In conclusion, I suppose that childhood is one of the most peaceful periods of human life. So children should enjoy these moments, and they should not desire grow up.

Проверьте, пожалуйста

[Shadow804]

Слушайте, а вместо him or her можно поставить their?

[English Guru]

Shadow804, если their будет относится к people, a person или somebody, то да! Согласен, что иногда him or her вписывается некрасиво...

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children seems

seem

children are defenseless creatures and the cannot

they

what clothes is better

are better

Despite I respect their opinion,

Despite the fact that I respect - запомнить!

Третий абзац неудачный!!! Где контраргументы про безопасность детей?!

and do what you want

Не обращайтесь к читателю на you

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protect us from everything that have bad reputation

everything that has a bad reputation

when you are a child

Старайтесь не обращаться к читателю на you

parents even afraid to leave

are even afraid

children will not in safety

will not be in safety - future simple от глагола to be

it is moral duty.

a moral duty

should not desire grow up.

desire to grow up

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[tanya3533]

Спасибо!
Постараюсь изменить третий абзац. Он, действительно не совсем удачный.

[Olga]

спасибо большое)

[Зиля]

Many people believe that childhood is the safest period of our life. But others do not agree with this point of view. Let us consider who is right?

In my opinion, it is really beneficial to be a child. First of all, teenagers are provided with pocket money by their parents. That is why, they must not earn a living and can devote to education themselves. Secondly, young people are protected and supported by our government. For example, orphans are provided with a house, meal, clothes and other necessary things by state. There are such rights of children as a free education, health service, development of sport skills and so on.

However, some people think that chilhood is not the safest and happiest time of people`s life. Children are thought to be such weak creatures that they can not stand up for themselves. I absolutelly disagree with this opinion. Teenagers nowadays are so developed that can solve any life problems.

To sum up, I still think that children in today`s world are very happy and lucky, because they have a lot of opportunities to develop themselves. They are able to go in for sport, study at school, have much free time which they can spend doing something they enjoy.

[English Guru]

Let us consider who is right?

Возможно, точка в конце будет лучше, так как у вас написано Let us consider

free education, health service, development of sport skills and so on

требуется запятая перед and при перечислении

Teenagers nowadays are so developed that can solve

that they can

Третий абзац нужно поделить на два, тогда будет классическая структура эссе!!!

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[Зиля]

Спасибо

[konstfv]

вот мой ужас

Every adult has gone through the important period of time which is called the childhood. Nowadays some people claim that childhood years are the calmest years of person's life while others say it is not so. Let's discuss this problem and try to consider various points of view.

Personally, I would say that I agree with the majority and i think that childhood is the most secure period of our life. What are my arguments? Well, firstly, in normal families children are usually treated nicely by their parents who provide their beloved sons or daughters with all the necessary things. Secondly, the responsibility for your actions is not really strict so kids can be a bit careless. Finally, infants don't have to think about money and food as it is the deal of their parents.

However, some people seem to think a bit differently. They believe that not every kid has a wonderful and careless childhood. For instance, some of them are bullied in school, others live in families where elements of violence may occur from time to time. Moreover, the fact of existance of little orphans and homeless children in this world should not be forgotten.

Despite the statements above, I absolutely disagree with those who consider childhood as a unsafe time of our life. If a little boy or a girl has a parent who treats him or her badly, he or she can go to police at any time. What's more, our goverment makes some attempts to solve the problem of homeless kids.

In conclusion, I want to state once again that a period of pre-adult life is quite safe time in general. At least, it is much more safer than the life of an adult. People are kids only for the first fourteen years of their lives, then there comes the adulthood.

[English Guru]

the calmest years of person's life

a person's life

life while others say

Требуется запятая перед while

Let's

В эссе не используем сокращения. Вообще никогда. Let us.

the most secure

the securest

the responsibility for your actions

Нельзя обращаться к читателю на you/your

don't have

Не сокращаем = do not have

existance

existence

consider childhood as a unsafe time

an unsafe

What's more,

What is more,

it is much more safer

much safer

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вот мой ужас

Я бы так не сказал. У Вас очень сильная аргументация и лексика. Перечитайте про степени сравнения прилагательных )))