Being disciplined and well-organised has the most significant role in life.

[Elena]

Nowadays some people reckon that being disciplined and well-organised has the most significant role in life. The others maintain the idea that only talented individuals can receive recognition of the entire world. Let us consider who is right.
I am of the opinion that discipline is much more important than talent. Firstly, every person has a chance to succeed in life if he has some special skills, such as attentiveness, diligence, zeal and etc. Eventually these ones develop professional knowledge of any occupation. Secondly, there is a great number of various courses, schools or universities helping people to become more intelligent and cultured. So, studying may let a self-disciplined person achieve great results.
On the contrary, some individuals argue that the talent is the highest priority. Thus there are professions that require natural comprehension or talent, for example, an actor, a singer or an artist.
However, I cannot agree with that because in today’s world there are places, where human beings can be taught such professions, What is more, the biggest part of popular actors or singers have studied in special institutions.
In conclusion, I would like to admit that every person decide what is more considerable for him. Also, to my mind, every individual has a piece of talent that can be advanced with discipline.

Проверьте,пожалуйста.

[English Guru]

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