Some people think that the boys and girls should study separately at different schools

[English Guru]

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10/14

[godney17]

Getting education is the most important thing in our life.We need good tutors and good atmosphere of studying. Where a person can learn how to communicate with others.Do we need that girls and boys study separately?
In my opinion, it is wrong.Both genders should learn together.Firstly, it is a good way to understand differencies between them.Secondly,process of studying helps to communicate
more freely.They would get a good experience how to behave in different situations.
Work in team is an amazing personal quality,it is nodoubt that separate classes are bad for this one.
We can find a contrary point of view that boys and girls have their own interests and opinions.There is the reason why they will argue ,therefore will be misunderstood.
I disagree with this statement,school is a part of socialization where young people get knowledge of each others moods,wishes and interests in all spheres.
In conclusion i want to say, we live in a modern world ,where all are simple and convenient,some rules are disappeared by new generations.Gender,age,race is not important like 2 centuries ago and education has been simplier,this is why boys and girls study together.

[English Guru]

differencies

differences

Work in team

The ability to work in a team

it is nodoubt that

there is no doubt

There is the reason why they will argue

This is

knowledge of each others

knowledge of each other's

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I want

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12/14

[Ruselkun]

Можете проверить мое эссе?Заранее спасибо!
There was always lot of discussion about different educational systems. Nowadays some people claim that boys and girls should not study together. However, there is an opinion that all genders should study together. Let us start by considering pros and coins.

From my point of view, there is no need to teach boys and girls at different schools.
In schools where boys and girls study together children learn how to talk with other genders, chatting with people with completely different world view children develop their personality.

Moreover, teenagers often fall in love with their classmates, so they would miss the important experience if you make them study separately.

On the other hand, some people say that it is really necessary to teach genders at different schools. In their mind, boys and girls are always arguing with each other and cause stressful situations which can damage child's psychic.

I completely disagree with that point of view. this kind of conflicts is necessary as it gives important social experience which helps them to develop their own individuality.

To sum up, I would like to say that there are a lot of points of view about gender's educational systems and we should respect them but I believe that both genders should study together as it is simple and effective.

[English Guru]

pros and coins.

... and cons.

From my point of view, there is no need to teach boys and girls at different schools.
In schools where boys and girls study together children learn how to talk with other genders, chatting with people with completely different world view children develop their personality.

Moreover, teenagers often fall in love with their classmates, so they would miss the important experience if you make them study separately.

Обязательно объединить в один абзац.

which can damage child's psychic.

Так не говорят... Замените например на which can cause psychological trauma.

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