At school students do not study enough modern authors and modern literature

[Christina]

There are various kinds and genres of literature.The classical literature has been popular for all times, but people have different attitude to modern literature: some of them are keen on it and consider that it should be learned at school , while others think studing this type of literature is a waste of time.Who is right?

In my opinion, schoolboys and schoolgirls do not study enough modern authors for several reasons.First and foremost, it is a lack of time to learn it because a school program is difficult nowadays.Secondly, some books of modern literature are useless as they have not got any common sense.

On the other hand , students should learn this type of literature because it can help us to understand a modern lifestyle.Moreover, modern authors help us to avoid many problems of young people as they write about it.

It seems to me that is not right. Although, modern literature makes us more better equipped to deal with different situations which may arise in our today's life,but classical literature teaches us more than modern.

All in all, I believe that all kinds and genres of literature help to form people's values. If a man want to be a higly-educated person, he should read classical and modern literature.

[Christina]

Проверьте, пожалуйста, мое эссе.

[English Guru]

Все сочинения будут рано или поздно проверены )))

The classical literature

Gr - артикль не нужен

different attitude

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studing

Sp - studying

more better equipped

Gr - makes us better equipped

Although, modern literature makes

P - Не нужна запятая: http://iconlogic.blogs.com/weblog/2012/03/writing ... a-comma-go-after-although.html

he should read classical and modern literature

Coh - напрашивается связка both ... and

In my opinion, schoolboys and schoolgirls do not study enough modern authors for several reasons.First and foremost, it is a lack of time to learn it because a school program is difficult nowadays.Secondly, some books of modern literature are useless as they have not got any common sense.

Старайтесь писать 3 аргумента.

It seems to me that is not right. Although, modern literature makes us more better equipped to deal with different situations which may arise in our today's life,but classical literature teaches us more than modern.

Log. Ну так вы уж определитесь!!! Я так и не понял, вы согласны, что в школах изучают недостаточно современной литературы?! Излагайте свои мысли чётко. Тут вы ходите по лезвию бритвы, так как вы толком не опровергли контраргумент. Некоторые преподаватели вполне могут поставить 0 за решение коммуникативной задачи и за всё эссе.

Коэффициенты:

К1 (решение коммуникативной задачи): 3
К2 (организация текста): 2
К3 (лексика): 3
K4 (грамматика): 2
К5 (орфография и пунктуация): 2

ИТОГ: 12/14 Это если считать, что формальное опровержение контраргумента есть "It seems to me that is not right." Однако опасно, есть шанс получить 0.

[Christina]

Огромное спасибо

[Михаил]

Nowadays in our modern world people have a choice in literature. There are marvelous number of different kinds. Classical literature has been popular for all times, but people have a different attitude to modern literature. Some of them like it and consider that it should be learned at school, others think that this type of literature is a waste of time. Who is right I wonder?

In my opinion pupils don't study enough modern authors for several reasons. Firstly, some books of modern literature haven't got any common sense and gain. Secondly, modern system of education is very difficult and pupils don't have free time to learn modern literature. Thirdly,the literature of "old time" is more convenient for modern generation.

On the other hand, pupils should learn this type of literature because it can helps them to understand a modern lifestyle. Moreover, modern authors help us to avoid many problems of young people as they write about it.

It seems to me that it isn't right. I'm sure, that only classical literature makes us more equipped to deal with different situations which may arise in our today's life.

All in all, I believe that all kinds of literature help us to shape of the mentality and if you want to be a highly-educated person, you should read classical and modern literature.

[English Guru]

There are marvelous number of different kinds.

Сразу много ошибок в одном предложении: There is a marvellous number of different kinds of books. - да и вообще предложение не очень...

Who is right I wonder?

Запятая перед I wonder

In my opinion pupils

Запятая после вводной конструкции in my opinion

Thirdly,the literature of "old time" is more convenient for modern generation.

странный аргумент....

it can helps

it can help

I'm sure, that

Нет запятой

It seems to me that it isn't right. I'm sure, that only classical literature makes us more equipped to deal with different situations which may arise in our today's life.

Так каково ВАШЕ МНЕНИЕ? Не переключайтесь на другую тему! Вы пишите только про modern literature и должны выражать мнение по поводу неё!

isn't

don't

Не сокращайте слова! Это не письмо другу!

-1 балл за грамматику
-2 балла за решение коммуникативной задачи (где ваше мнение? + зачем отклоняетесь от темы?)
-1 балл за организацию текста (небольшая нелогичность, сокращения)

ИТОГ: 10/14

[Ekaterinam]

Здравствуйте! Проверьте, пожалуйста моё эссе.
Nowadays a lot of teenagers complain about books they are meant to read at school. They would prefer to study more modern authors if they had the opportunity to do it. Is it really necessary to draw attention to authors who live and create in our time?
As far as I am concerned, teachers should pay more attention to modern literature. First of all, the way we live is changing very fast, so classical literature cannot answer all questions we ask ourselves. Secondly, modern literature can help youngsters to develop sincere love for reading. Finally, studying modern literature will broaden our knowledge of the world and help us get better understanding of people around us.
However, some people tend to think that modern authors are not supposed to be mentioned at school at all. They share common opinion that modern literature is not on the same level with classics. Also, they consider that it is difficult for writers to invent something new.
Nevertheless, I still believe that there is future for literature and in order not to miss it we ought to read modern authors and study their work.
To sum up, modern authors should not be ignored. They deserve to be read and studied.
(200 слов)

[Proofreader]

Secondly, modern literature can help youngsters to develop sincere love for reading

youngsters to develop a sincere love for reading

Also, they consider that it is difficult for writers to invent something new.

Also, they feel that it is difficult for writers to invent something new.

Nevertheless, I still believe that there is future for literature and in order not to miss it we ought to read modern authors and study their work.

there is a future for modern literature and we must continue to read and study these author's fine works.

[Elena]

At school students do not study enough modern authors and modern literature.

There are two opposite opinions on the problem of the deficiency of studying modern literature and authors at schools.Some people claim that it is necessary to learn modern compositions,but others are disagree.It is often difficult which position to take whenever there is a choice of books.

I consider that every school must teach not only classic bit also modern literature.It broadens the mind and gives understanding about the modern world.Moreover,contemporary art ,including literature, more accessible and likely to modern children.

However,some people think that students should not study modern authorsat schools.They are sore that only classic literature can give a broad knowledges and they claim that students get more information based on facts about the past.

I cannot agree with this opinion constantly.These arguments are groundless.Children should know not only the past but only the present.

Taking everuthing into consideration ,there are two viewpoints on the problem of the deficiency of studying modern literature.But it is generally agreed today that each person should to read books.
Проверьте , пожалуйста.

[Kovalis]

По лексике: лучше будет there exist two opposite opinions… - это больше в публицистическом стиле, чем there is/are.
Opinion of/about… at school (s убрать)… others disagree (are убрать)…
Whenever there is a choice of books – переведите, пожалуйста, все предложение.
Bit в but 
Understanding of… мне по душе insight
Likely to modern children – перевод?
They are sore that… - перевод?
A good knowledges – неправильно!!! – considerable knowledge
About the Past
Constantly ??? – переведите.
But only the Present – перевод???

Добавлено спустя 8 минут 6 секунд:
Elena,
создается впечатление, что Вы активно пользуете Internet-переводчик. Язык очень бедный, временами весьма непонятный. Смотрите мои вопросы выше.
По содержанию:
1) opinion, слава Богу, есть. Аргумент в пользу этого тоже есть, но этого мало, он не раскрыт, поэтому вряд ли будет считаться продуктивным. Доработайте. Не надо писать про доступность, раскройте сам аргумент. Это более важно.
2) 1 аргумент - это мало, еще и не раскрытый до конца. Не пойдет. Еще нужно хотя бы один. Или хороший такой, валидный, пример :-)
3) Контраргумент вызывает мноооого вопросов. Вы с чего это взяли? Это похоже на частное мнение, и уж точно это не является common knowledge, давайте так. Так что контраргумент не продуктивен и высосан из пальца. Подумайте, что Вы сами себе могли бы возразить??? Почему современная литература не достойна того, чтобы ее изучали в школе. Предложите свои варианты, а я предложу свои. Работаем над КОНТРаргументом!
4) Заключение надо переделать. Нет подтверждения Вашего мнения, воды налили, прикрылись it is generally agreed. Не пойдет.

[Elena]

спасибо. буду дорабатывать.

[Kristina]

Nowadays, with existing of modern technologies people prefer to find all needed information on the online recourses than in books. However, school students still have to read book whether they are written by a classical writer or modern. However, many people argue about should people learn modern literature in schools or not .

In my opinion, schools should not replace classical literature by modern , because reading traditional literature has many benefits. Firstly, while reading the same books people can easily expand their vocabulary and decelop better communication skills than while reading contemporary writings, because classical authors often use different words which we do not use in our everyday life. Secondly, classical literature give us food for thought, because plots of this works are always convoluted and we can not easily understand what author wants to say us, so it can help us to push brain to its fullest capacity.

On the other hand, many people claim that in contemporary literature students can find answers on questions which they are interested in, because authors of these writings raise the problems which connected with modern lifestyle.

I do not agree with above statements completely. I think that classical literature can give us more important lessons than modern , can learn us moral values, so there is in need to include modern in school curriculum .

To sum up there are different points of view I strongly believe that both modern and classical literature enrich our inner world.

[Danil.K.]

"At school students do not study enough modern authors and modern literature"

Some people are convinced that at school students do not study enough both modern literature and authors while other disagree. Let us consider some views of this issue.

As for me, I think nowadays we do not pay attention to modern authors and literature at school at all. To start with, there exist countless famous books which are deserved to be read and learned because the amount of them are related with our daily social problems. Also, involving modern literature in school programms gives students an opportunity to feel the differences between modern and classical authors. Moreover, it probably makes lessons of reading for students more various and interesting.

Nevertheless, there is a opposite opinion. On the one hand, some people are sure that a modern literature do not provide any benefits for students at all. On the other hand, people tend to think there is only classic literature providing students the real point of worldview.

I personally disagree with the opposite opinion. As far as I am concerned, it is not worth it to decrease the value of modern books including a lot of types and genres. There are many outstanding authors and who could help to broaden frames of our mind. Moreover, it is unfair only to focus students' attention on a classic literature while a modern once has a lot of facilities, for instance, showing us life's issues of reality.

To sum up, it is necessary to include modern authors' books in a school programm. It gives an oportunity to read and combine both classical and modern literature and leads to understanding of the world.

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[English Guru]

to find all needed information on the online recourses than in books.

rather online than in books
в любом случае, resources

school students still have to read book

books

still have to read book whether they are written by a classical writer or modern.

whether так не употребляется. тут уместна связка regardless of the fact that ИЛИ no matter what ...

many people argue about should people learn modern

А вот тут many people argue whether people should learn...
whether = ли в русском языке

should not replace classical literature by modern

replace... with modern

decelop

develop

classical literature give us food

gives

plots of this works

these works

the problems which connected with

are connected

modern lifestyle.

a modern lifestyle

so there is in need

a need

to include modern

modern authors / modern ones

To sum up

Требуется запятая после

-1 балл за решение коммуникативной задачи
-1 балл за организацию текста
-2 балла за грамматику
-1 балл за лексику

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Let us consider some views of this issue.

Если view в значении opinion, то view on
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/view_1

we do not pay attention to modern authors and literature at school at all.

...or literature
При отрицании and заменяется на or

the amount of them are related with our daily social problems.

is related to
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there is a opposite opinion.

an

On the one hand, some people are sure that a modern literature do not provide any benefits for students at all. On the other hand, people tend to think there is only classic literature providing students the real point of worldview.

Неправильно употребляете on the one hand, on the other hand
В рамках третьего абзаца вводим аргументы также: firslty, secondle, moreover и т.д.
Начать третий абзац можно On the other hand,

to focus students' attention on a classic literature

артикль не нужен

a modern once

one

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