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Сообщение tanya g.l » 23.02.2015, 16:03

Проверьте, пожалуйста эссе.

Circus shows are popular among young and old, men, women, and children. Who does not enjoy watching a circus show? Is circus the best entertainment? Should parent take children to the circus?

In my opinion, circus shows can be exciting and thrilling. Children live colourful, shining clothes and fireworks. I believe funny clowns and animals make children smile and laugh. Getting good emotions can make them feel happier. Besides, going to the circus is a good way to spend time with family. Parents are able to find out more about their child's interests. Children share their emotions and thoughts with parents easier. Their relationship can become better.

However, many people say that parents should not take children to the circus. Animals are used for entertainment in circuses. They can experience suffering and cruelty while training for the show. Children also might get used to see animals as objects that do not feel pain. That is why going to the circus is a bad way to learn about animals.

I cannot agree with this statement. There are many organizations that protect animal rights. For example, PETA works on variety of issues, including animal abuse. What is more, the amount of animal-free circuses has increased.

In conclusion, I would like to say that the circus is a good entertainment for children,but parents should explain that people must not treat animals badly.
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Сообщение English Guru » 07.03.2015, 01:08

tanya g.l писал(а):Should parent take
parents

tanya g.l писал(а):Children live colourful, shining clothes and fireworks.
live? Не понял смысла предложения

tanya g.l писал(а):with family
with the family

tanya g.l писал(а):might get used to see
get used +Ving = might get used to seeing

Эссе воспринимается немного однобоко, потому что существуют и другие виды развлечений для детей, о которых можно было бы упомянуть в 3 абзаце. Хотя тема сама очень однобоко звучит... :think:

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Сообщение Victoria tlt » 09.03.2015, 08:21

В первом обзаце надо поставить проблему.
Теперь возникает вопрос, какая проблема может быть у этой темы?
Лично мне кажется, что здесь можно два варианта рассматривать:
Цирк для детей - скучно/ интересно
Или второй вариант: лучшее развлечение для детей не только цирк, но что-то другое.
То есть два разных сочинения, а Вы предлагаете все перемешать вместе?
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Сообщение karina_mia » 09.03.2015, 23:41

Victoria tlt, согласна, что тему нужно формулировать чётче. С другой стороны, на ЕГЭ такие размытие темы не попадаются, это просто какая-то тупая тема из интернета!
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Сообщение Victoria tlt » 10.03.2015, 14:04

Не из интернета она, к сожалению. Из официального учебника ЕГЭ 2015, рекомендованного ФИПИ под редакцией самой Вербицкой. Чёрт его знает, какие неожиданности ждут нас на самом экзамене, поэтому надо учиться даже из самой дурацкой темы делать конфетку.
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Сообщение NadyaZ » 01.11.2016, 14:05

Many people think that the circus is the best entertainment for children but others do not agree.
I personally think that circus is not the best entertainment for children. A number of key issues arise from the statement. Firstly, when circus’ workers teach animals they could use physical force. It is undeniable that these actions injure them. Secondly, most of time circus’ animals are in cages. And not always circus’ workers contain the places are clean and comfortable. What are more animals always move about the country, or the world. It is stress for them. Finally, this entertainment can be really dangerous. Animals are unpredictable and people cannot fully control them.
On the other hand people are convinced that the circus is the best entertainment for children so child visually recognizes and examines the animal’s world. And it is the best way.
I strongly disagree with this statement, because children and their parents can visually learn the animal’s world by visit in zoos, or walk in forests.
The arguments we have presented would indicate that circus’ entertainment has some negative parts and it could be unsafe and useless for children and their parents.
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Great English, only minor corrections needed

Сообщение Englishwander » 02.02.2017, 06:15

Circus shows are popular among young and old, men, women, and children. Who does not enjoy watching a circus show? Is circus the best entertainment? Should (every) parent take (their) children to the circus?

In my opinion, circus shows can be exciting and thrilling. Children (live colourful, shining)(love the performer's colourful) clothes and (the) fireworks (are there fireworks at the circus?). I believe funny clowns and animals make children smile and laugh. Getting good emotions can make them feel happier. Besides, going to the circus is a good way to spend time with family. Parents are able to find out more about their child's interests. Children share their emotions and thoughts with parents (easier)(more easily, in such a setting). Their relationship (can become better)(improve).

However, many people say that parents should not take children to the circus. Animals are used for entertainment in circuses. They can experience suffering and cruelty while training for the show. Children also might get used to see(ing) animals as objects that do not feel pain. That is why going to the circus is a bad way to learn about animals.

I cannot agree with this statement. There are many organizations that protect animal rights. For example, PETA works on variety of issues, including animal abuse. What is more, the amount of animal-free circuses has increased.

In conclusion, I would like to say that the circus is a good entertainment for children,but parents should explain that people must not treat animals badly.
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Сообщение Atchan » 05.02.2017, 21:17

Проверьте, пожалуйста)

It is common knowledge that circus is good way to make laugh both children and adults. But is there a better option for children that can surpass circus when it comes to entertaining?

To my mind, circus does not make the first place in an entertainment list. You would probably agree that any activity is better for children. That is why we should see them on playgrounds, sport courts or anywhere child can be engaged in some kind of action and interaction. Secondly,kids being on the way of growin-up, should be focused on their interests and parents must forse them to find what they like, hence help them succeed in adulthood. It must be someting child is curious about and what makes his entertained. Cut a long story short, there are a lot of activities that could be best for growing man.

But a lot of people think that children like colourful and rapid-changing picture which they can recieve being at circus. Secondly, there a lot of stunning stunts and greatful animals could be seen in circus.

To a certain extent, it is right, but not in the long run, because it is one-time entertainment that becomes boring in the end.

Taking everything into acount, circus is a great and amusement show, but does not fulfill all children's requires. They will always find what is the best for them and decideing instead of them is wrong move of us.
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