Письмо другу: family chores, cooking

[English Guru]

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Проверьте пожалуйста письмо. Заранее спасибо.

You have received a letter from your English-speaking pen-friend John who writes:

...Last week my mom went to New York to help my aunt with her new baby. My dad and I had to do all the housework ourselves. What kind of family chores do you normally have, if at all? What would you cook for yourself, if you had to? Do you think boys should be able to cook and to keep house, and why?

Next weekend I'm going hiking with my classmates...

Write a letter to John.
In your letter
- answer his questions
- ask 3 questions about his summer plans
Write 100–140 words.
Remember the rules of letter writing.

Письмо:

Moscow
Russia
22 November 2013
Dear John,

Thank you for your letter. It was great to hear from you after such a long time. I really should have written you sooner, I have been busy with my exams.

Usually I have to wash the dishes, clean the floor and ,of course, walk with my dog. If I have to cook by myself, I will try to make something easy, for example fries mushroom and boil rice. I think that boys should be able to cook and keep house clean, because a person must be self-dependent.

Its great that you’re going hiking at last. How many kilometers will you be walking? What’re you going to do together? What places are you going to visit?

Anyway, I must go and get on with my exams.

Hope to hear from you,

All the best,

Igor

[karina_mia]

I will try to make something easy, for example fries mushroom and boil rice.

fry mushrooms and boil rice

and keep house clean

keep the house clean

Поскольку ошибки не препятствуют решению коммуникативной задачи, письмо заслуживает максимальный балл: 6/6.

[tanya3533]

Здравствуйте, Вы не могли бы проверить письмо по англ? Заранее благодарна!

...Last week my mom went to New York to help my aunt with her new baby. My dad and I had to do all the housework ourselves. What kind of family chores do you normally have, if at all? What would you cook for yourself, if you had to? Do you think boys should be able to cook and to keep house, and why?

Next weekend I'm going hiking with my classmates...

43 Kalinina Street
Yaroslavl
Russia
10 December 2013

Dear Sara,
Thank you for your letter. Sorry I didn’t answer you earlier but I was busy with my studying.
Well…I know it’s hard when your mum goes away, so I sympathize to you. I also have to do some family chores, for example, cleaning the flat, washing the dish and going to the supermarket to buy some products. When I’m alone at home, I usually cook an omlette. Besides girls, boys also should be independent to some extent.
Oh, you’re going hiking! It’s great! So where are you going? How long will you be hiking? And where are you going to stay?
Well…I’d better go now, as it’s too late.
Write soon!
All the best,
Tanya.

[sergejmotyzka]

Нам такоеже задали сегодня в школе, хорошо что есть образец на сайте, помог очень

[English Guru]

Sorry I didn’t answer you earlier but I was busy with my studying.

Логичнее использовать связку because, а не but

so I sympathize to you

I sympathize with you

washing the dish

washing dishes

When I’m alone at home, I usually cook

Запятая не нужна. В сложноподчиненных предложениях в английском она почти никогда не нужна.

I’d better go now, as it’s too late.

Запятая не нужна

Коэффициенты:

К1 (решение коммуникативной задачи): 2
К2 (организация текста): 1
К3 (языковое оформление): 2

ИТОГ: 5/6

K3 на грани! Еще одна ошибка и снимут еще 1 балл. В K2 снял один балл за нелогичную связку!

[tanya3533]

Спасибо большое! Я все учла!
Постараюсь не делать больше таких ошибок