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Вот что я написала по английски.
My name is Julua. I am twenty-one.
I work as a programmer in RUSSIAN STATE SCIENTIFIC CENTER FOR ROBOTICS AND TECHNICAL CYBERNETICS.
At work I am engaged creation of training programs for technical complexes. I like my job.
Although I both work as a programmer, and I study as the programmer, I dream to work with children.
Earlier I worked as the teacher in the children's center, taught children to needlework (sewing, knitting, origami and many other things).
Unfortunately, because of university I had to leave work, but I plan, next year again will return for old work.
I like to do in the spare time needlework, to prepare, read, walk, be taken for a ride in a car.
Recently I started knitting Lyumyera (candlestick) from an animated cartoon "The beauty and a monster".
I have always many ideas, my family already got used to it. There is one phrase from Goethe's book "Faust": "everything is told by the madman and the fantast" is about me.
For example I very much want to construct the fountain – decorative, I even bought everything for this purpose.
And still I somehow wanted to construct a case, drew, bought a material and constructed.
I like music, in the childhood dreamed to play a piano, but parents had no money for music school.
Therefore when I studied in college, on the first big grant I bought home a piano and the father agreed to pay music lessons. I still am engaged and very much it is pleasant to me.
Still I very much love cars and all that is connected with them. In the car I try to do everything.
Now I had a new hobby, these are races. When I will learn to go better, I will participate in drags arrivals. These are arrivals on a short distance.
Thanks for attention. End.

А вот что я написала по русски.
Меня зовут Юля. Мне 21 год.
Я работаю программистом в НИИ робототехники и технической кибернетики.
На работе я занимаюсь создание обучающих программ для технических комплексов. Моя работа мне очень нравится.
Хотя я и работаю программистом, и учусь на программиста,я мечтаю работать с детьми.
Раньше я работала педагогом в детском центре, учила детей рукоделию(шитье,вязание, оригами и многое другое).
К сожалению, из-за университета мне пришлось оставить работу, но я планирую ,в следующем году снова вернутся на старую работу.
В свободное время я люблю заниматься рукоделием, готовить, читать, гулять, кататься на машине.
Недавно я начала вязать Люмьера(подсвечник) из мультика «Красавица и чудовище».
У меня всегда много идей, моя семья уже привыкла к этому. Есть одна фраза из книги Гете «Фауст» : «все говорят безумец и фантаст» - это про меня.
К примеру я очень хочу построить фонтан – декоративный, я даже купила все для этого.
А еще я как то захотела построить шкаф, нарисовала, купила материал и построила.
Мне нравится музыка, в детстве мечтала играть на фортепиано, но у родителей не было денег на музыкальную школу.
Поэтому когда я училась в колледже, на свою первую большую стипендию я купила домой фортепиано и папа согласился оплачивать уроки музыки. Я до сих пор занимаюсь и мне очень нравится.
Еще я очень люблю машины и все что с ними связанно. В своей машине я стараюсь все делать сама.
Теперь у меня появилось новое увлечение, это гонки. Когда я научусь лучше ездить, я буду участвовать в драг заездах. Это заезды на короткую дистанцию.
Спасибо за внимание. Конец.

Сразу хочу написать извините за грамотность по русскому. Сочинение не мой конек.
Буду очень признательна за правки.

[English Guru]

Julua.

Julia - можно на английский манер написать

I work as a programmer in RUSSIAN STATE SCIENTIFIC CENTER FOR ROBOTICS AND TECHNICAL CYBERNETICS.

at RUSSIAN STATE SCIENTIFIC CENTER FOR ROBOTICS AND TECHNICAL CYBERNETICS

At work I am engaged creation of training programs for technical complexes. I like my job.

engaged in the creation

Although I both work as a programmer, and I study as the programmer, I dream to work with children.

Although I both work as a programmer and study to be a programmer, I dream to work with children.

Earlier I worked as the teacher in the children's center, taught children to needlework (sewing, knitting, origami and many other things).

taught children needlework

Unfortunately, because of university I had to leave work, but I plan, next year again will return for old work.

... but next year I plan to return to my old work.

I like to do in the spare time needlework, to prepare, read, walk, be taken for a ride in a car.

In my spare time I like needlework, cooking, reading, walking, having a car ride.

"The beauty and a monster"

Beauty and the beast он вроде называется

I have always many ideas, my family already got used to it. There is one phrase from Goethe's book "Faust": "everything is told by the madman and the fantast" is about me.

I always have many ideas ...
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For example I very much want to construct the fountain – decorative, I even bought everything for this purpose.

For example I want to construct the fountain very much – a decorative one ...

And still I somehow wanted to construct a case, drew, bought a material and constructed.

WTF case? And once upon a time I decided to make a wardrobe (cupboard). I made a sketch, bought all the materials and built it myself.

I like music, in the childhood dreamed to play a piano, but parents had no money for music school.

I dreamed of playing .....

the father agreed to pay music lessons.

pay for

I still am engaged and very much it is pleasant to me.

I still practice and it is still so pleasant for me!

Still I very much love cars

I love cars very much

Now I had a new hobby, these are races. When I will learn to go better, I will participate in drags arrivals. These are arrivals on a short distance.

Now I have a new hobby: races. When I learn to drive better, I will participate in drag races. These are short distance races.

Thanks for attention. End.

Thank you for your attention. The end.

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