The conversation

[TheSilence]

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Telephone talk
Telephone ring sounded in the silence of two room apartment, as thunder in the clear sky – sorry of a banality.
- Hallo – householder taked it. – I’m listening you very carefully.
- I’m talking with Nikolay Stepanovich?
- I’m listening you very carefully.
- Sorry, but are you Nicolay Stepanovich exactly?
- I’m listening you very carefully.
- It is number 265-14-35?
- Perhaps
- As it? I was have mistake in your number?
- Maybe
- That is ridiculous! On it number I must talk with Nikolay Stepanovich exactly!
- I’m listening you very carefully.
- So, you agree that you Nicolay Stepanovic.
- You speak it, but I don’t
- You are Nicolay Stepanovich, or I put the telephone
- Stop, what’s up?
- The thing is – said talker, with angry – that I just moved from Germany and must give parcel to Nicolay Stepanovich, calling number 265-14-35.
- That is inside parcel?
- Why don’t you question who is sender?
- There is different nothing. Most interesting in parcel – that is inside it.
- I so understand, you are Nicolay Stepanovich.
- I don’t answer neither negative nor positive
- Why?
- Simple I have interest, that is inside it
- But for it you must drive to me, hotel “Stolichniy”, to give me passport, and I give you parcel immediately
- It would be good…
- So have you difficult?
- My dear, what for me foreign problems?
- All! My patient is over! Or you agree that you Nicolay Stepanovich, or our talk is over!
- Already. So fast.
- What did you want?
- Dialogue, my dear, dialogue. I’m so alone. And my telephone ring so rarely, and sometime so want myself conversation.
Telephone was over.
-And this still did not understand. What cruel century,thought
Victor Yefimovich, whose telephone number was 265-14-37, and,pushing
wheelchair wheels he rolled to the window overlooking the Boulevard,
look at passers-by.

[Anastasia]

Особо не буду касаться творческого аспекта, только основное:

two room apartment

двухкомнатная квартира у них это one bedroom flat

taked it

took the receiver

listening you

listening to you

-I’m talking with Nikolay Stepanovich?
-I’m listening you very carefully.

Am I .... ?

As it?

- Как это допустим.
What do you mean by "perhaps"?

So, you agree that you Nicolay Stepanovic.

do you .... you are

with angry

with anger = angrily

That is inside parcel?

What's in the parcel?

-There is different nothing.

- Какая мне разница.
I don't care.

that is inside it

what's inside

-So have you difficult?

- Так что же вам мешает?
So why not?

foreign problems?

неправильно

patient

patience - грыжа

Dialogue

communication лучше

-And this still did not understand. What cruel century,thought

ужасно

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