Some people think that the boys and girls should study separately at different schools

[Эмилия]

It is generally accepted that it is better for both boys and girls to study separately at different schools. Some disagree with this statement. I would like to express my point of view on this problem.

To begin with I must say that we are people and it is necessary for us to communicate to each other. Besides, this communication will be useful for both boys and girls because it will be easier for them to reach an understanding in the future. Last but not least, attending the same schools they get an equal education. We have the same rights on education, so it is important to study together.

Nevertheless, let us consider this problem from another angle. Some people think that boys and girls should study separately because they have different learning styles. For example, it is considered that boys know exact sciences better than girks and forte of girls is learning of languages. There would seem to be clear pros and cons to both options.

For every complicated problem there is a simple solution. Personally, I think that studying together they have a good opportunity to contest to each other. Thay have stimul to improve their knowledge, develop themselves.

To sum up, I totally support the idea that boys and girls should not attend separate schools.

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[nadejdavlad1]

There are contrasting points of view regarding the question of whether boys and girls should study separately or together.

Some people think that boys and girls should study separately because the genders have different learning styles. For example, it is claimed that most boys achieve more highly than girls in the exact sciences, whereas girls’ forte is learning languages.

But on the other hand, one argument in favor of allowing boys and girls to study together is that it is necessary for us to communicate with each other, and this communication between the genders will be easier if boys and girls begin knowing one another when they are young. Besides that, another reason for allowing all the children to attend the same schools is that co-ed education safeguards an important value -- that all children get an equal education.

Sometimes complicated problems have simple solutions. I think that studying together provides boys and girls the opportunity to enhance their development because the distinct learning expertise of each gender can be a stimulus for the other to improve.

For these reasons, I support the idea that boys and girls should not attend separate schools.

[tim_9]

In modern society there are still many people supporting the idea that boys and girls should study separately. However, some people stand against this idea.
In my opinion, boys and girls should definitely study together in same schools. To start with, if representatives of both genders study together, they learn how to interact with each other and have more successful relationships in the future. Moreover, the schools where study both boys and girls do not have to choose some special educational programs for one gender only – they can use the standard ones. Last but not least, studying together is definitely more fun for the students, and that way they are able to hear opinions of completely different people with different world views.
On the other hand, some people believe that it is better when boys and girls study separately. In their mind, when studying together they just distract each other. These people also think that some subjects should only be taught to a certain gender.
I cannot agree with this opinion. Firstly, if the school administration is strict enough to the students, they will not distract anyone. Secondly, every developed country today stands for the gender equality, so both boys and girls should have an ability to study what they want, from the standard school program.
To sum up, I would like to say that in modern world both genders should study together as it is much more effective.

[English Guru]

To begin with I must say

To begin with - вводное слово, после которого должна стоять запятая

rights on education

С предлогом on не употребляется: http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/right_4

girks

girls

have stimul

have a stimulus

Эмилия, отлично!

ИТОГ: 14/14

Добавлено спустя 6 минут 6 секунд:

achieve more highly than girls

Непонятно... achieve higher results

provides boys and girls the opportunity

provides with - provides boys and girls with the opportunity
http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/provide

ИТОГ: 14/14 Хотя начинаю понимать, что и Вы и человек выше пользовались какой-то одинаковой заготовкой. А так - отличная работа. На экзамене необходимо уложиться в 50-60 минут и выучить все фразы.

Добавлено спустя 3 минуты 54 секунды:

do not have to choose some special educational programs

do not .... any special ...

in modern world

in the modern world обычно

tim_9, оригинально, свежо, не шаблонизировано!

ИТОГ: 14/14

Добавлено спустя 53 секунды:
Что за фигня в ветке?! У всех максималка! Кто же будет "party pooper"?

[Tory_96]

Some people think that boys and girls should receive education in various school. However, other believe that children can study together.
Let us consider who is right?
In my opinion, there are nothing sociale different among boys and girls. First of all, children should communicate with each over. Separetly studing cannot provide children a happy school days. Secondly, child is depended some complex when he had expierence only with boys or girls.
On the other hand, some people think that studing in private school better for children. In their mind, a school should develope discipline and ohter different skills.
I cannot agree with this statement. Childhood is the best time of human's life that is a reason, why boys and girls should studing together.
In conclusion I should say: so many people so many opinion. People should think about their child and his future at first. Not only it is a reason, why boys and girls should studing in one school, but it also can child finds friends and his first love.

[English Guru]

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[Tory_96]

Some people think that boys and girls should receive education in various school. However, other believe that children can study together.
Let us consider who is right?
In my opinion, there are nothing sociale different among boys and girls. First of all, children should communicate with each over. Separetly studing cannot provide children a happy school days. Secondly, child is depended some complex when he had expierence only with boys or girls. Finally, children feel more comfotable in big company.
On the other hand, some people think that studing in private school better for children. In their mind, a school should develope discipline and ohter different skills.
I cannot agree with this statement. Childhood is the best time of human's life that is a reason, why boys and girls should studing together.
In conclusion I should say: so many people so many opinion. People should think about their child and his future at first. Not only it is a reason, why boys and girls should studing in one school, but it also can child finds friends and his first love.

[English Guru]

Various schoolS
However, otherS believe
there are no social differences - у Вас неправильно написано
communicate with each oTHer
a child can become dependent on some complex
в эссе нельзя писать he, нужно упомянуть два рода - HE OR SHE
develop
the reason why запятой нет
can find friends and HIS OR HER first love

Всё, спокойной ночи. Насколько я могу это сделать с телефона, Ваше эссе заслуживает около 9/14 баллов. Подучите ошибки выше, и сможете написать лучше.

[Tory_96]

Спасибо за внимание)

[whisperr]

Many people remember the practice in the educational system of previous centuries when boys and girls studied separately. Was it a smart idea or not? Is it worth returning everything back? Let us start by considering pros and cons of it.

In my personal opinion, children should grow up together. First of all, the process of socialization considers a person’s life surrounded by completely different types of people. As a consequence, students who attend special schools have problems with communication in the future. It is difficult for them to find a common language. Besides, it might be simply inconvenient to change the whole system of education nowadays. Pupils have already got used to studying teamwise.

One should, nevertheless, consider the problem from another angle. Separate education may help to avoid various conflicts which often happen in a primary school because children are not still disposed to a dialogue. Furthermore, experts believe that girls are usually able to achieve greater results in mathematics and other exact science if they are separate from boys during the learning process, while boys succeed in the humanities subjects.

However, I am still convinced that it is necessary for teenagers to become adults together, so they could share any knowledge or experience and develop their own individuality.

To sum up, I would say that an adherence to old traditions and foundations is not always properly. The world is constantly changing and the society must not fall behind.

Проверьте, пожалуйста

[English Guru]

whisperr, браво! Сильная работа!

However, I am still convinced that it is necessary for teenagers to become adults together, so they could share any knowledge or experience and develop their own individuality.

Формально в эссе не должно быть абзацев, состоящих из одного предложения. Нужно разбить его на два.

adherence to old traditions and foundations is not always properly

... is not always proper. Здесь требуется прилагательное, а не наречие.

Ну, а так 14/14, конечно =)

[Вокодер]

2 Гуру
Вопрос по сочинению Эмилии. Первая фраза: "It is generally accepted that it is better for both boys and girls to study separately at different schools."
ИМХО, как раз наоборот, во всём мире "generally accepted" является система совместного обучения девочек и мальчиков. Таких школ в мире, ИМХО, подавляющее большинство.
Вы согласны? Если да, то вопрос.
Как отреагирует эксперт, если экзаменуемый допустит в эссе весьма спорное утверждение, как у Эмилии? Будет ли он придираться и снижать баллы? Если да, то по какому критерию? По К2 за нарушение логичности?

[English Guru]

ИМХО, как раз наоборот, во всём мире "generally accepted" является система совместного обучения девочек и мальчиков. Таких школ в мире, ИМХО, подавляющее большинство.

Я учился в мужской гимназии и у нас действительно утверждалось, что it is better for both boys and girls to study separately. Кстати, это было учебное заведение №1 по всем показателям в нашем небольшом городе.

Как отреагирует эксперт

Апеллирование к мнению "большинства" или "британским ученым" это, конечно, плохо. Однако эссе на ЕГЭ не требует уж такого высокого писательского штиля...

[EduardDz]

Some people think boys and girls should study separately at different schools. Others think that they should be taught together.

Separate schools for boys. Separate schools for girls. Why do parents isolate their children from opposite sex? Is it really so important?

School takes a huge part of people’s lives. We spend on the average eleven years in there. Wouldn’t it be boring to study only with boys or girls? There is no need in building fences between children and teenagers of opposite sex. Separate schools will definitely make them shy and timid. Teenagers, in my opinion, require regular life communication. Firstly, schools help to adapt in the unknown world. In society all men and women coexist together, so why shouldn’t schools be the same? Secondly, in separate schools pupils do not have an opportunity to know much about opposite sex. Of course, they have psychology lessons where all intimate things are told . It is obviously not enough. Theory without practice is useless as knowledge without communication.

However, some people think that school is school and the main function is studying. There is no place for love and entertainment in four grey walls of classroom. They choose separate schools for their offsprings.

These words do not seem to be true, because human’s life is about love and friends. Such strict rules can cause inferiority complex and break all future life.

To sum up, be kind to your children, think of their destiny and do not make mistakes. Choose the right school, which will be suitable for your child.

[English Guru]

opposite sex

the opposite sex - только два пола, поставьте артикль

life communication

странное словосочетание

in four grey walls

В данном случае лучше использовать предлог within

Theory without practice is useless as knowledge without communication.

Возьмите союз like вместо as, ведь вы сравниваете.

To sum up, be kind to your children, think of their destiny and do not make mistakes. Choose the right school, which will be suitable for your child.

Wouldn’t

Совет: у нас не статья, а эссе, старайтесь избегать сокращений слов и повелительного наклонения.

Choose the right school, which

Нет запятой

Отличный стиль, нешаблонное мышление, лексика и грамматика тоже на высоте Есть небольшие недочёты, есть куда стремиться, но это уже похоже на эссе студенческого уровня.

ИТОГ: 14/14

[EduardDz]

Спасибо за проверку и замечания!

[karma_police]

The issue of girls and boys studying together at school has always been the subject of heated discussions. While some think it is absolutely unnecessary to make any changes, others believe children must study separately.

In my opinion, it is only natural that boys and girls study at school with each other. Firstly, having the members of the opposite sex in a class can teach pupils how to behave in their presence and communicate with them, thus, socially, it will be less awkward for them in the future. Secondly, being taught together helps children find more friends and is more entertaining in regard to sporting events, for instance. Finally, teenagers may even have a romantic relationship with someone from their class, which is an inevitable experience people gain during adolescence.

However, there are those who are convinced there should be single-sex education. They claim relationships at school only distract pupils from lessons and homework and lead to unpleasant consequences for their parents.

I strongly disagree with this statement, because I think it is wrong to assume children are incapable of studying and having a relationship at the same time. Surely, parents should talk to their children about it and warn them, but it does not mean there is a need to resort to such drastic measures as studying separately.

In conclusion, I would say boys and girls should not be divided into diffirent schools. Not only does studying together help children successfully co-exist with the opposite sex, but it also makes the process of growing out easier.

Проверьте пожалуйста по критериям, хотелось бы узнать, какой я бы получила балл за это эссе.

[Chauysha]

ТЕМА: Some people think boys and girls should study separately at diffirent schools

Nowadays boys and girls are studying together in the most cases. But is it right? Should they go to different schools? Let us speculate who is right: the fans of modern classes, who claim that separating is bad or the opponents, who have another opinion.
In my point of view, boys and girls should study in the same class. Firstly, communication with another sex allows children to develop better in a social sphere and to expand their horizon so much. Secondly, in this case the children are more mature because they know a lot about another's sex behavior and preferences.
Nevertheless, we can find a contrary point of view. Some people think boys and girls should study separately at diffirent schools. They claim that there is a big gap between sex, so school should have different methods to explain the information. Also opponents believe that dividing children allows to protect them from psychological stress and strong emotional feelings.
However, I cannot agree with this opinion completely because I believe that this fulfill communication will help the child in the future to build healthy relationship with his family, friends and colleagues.
All in all, if the children study separately, they are limited in the social sphere.

[English Guru]

in the most cases.

in most cases (устойчиво)

But is it right? Should they go to different schools? Let us speculate who is right:

тавтология (right) - используйте синонимы

the fans of modern classes, who claim that separating is bad or the opponents, who have another opinion.

Запятые перед who не нужны

In my point of view,

FROM my point of view ИЛИ IN my view

a lot about another's sex behavior

the other sex's (что также звучит топорно), лучше как-то a lot about the opposite sex.
Повторите правило other / another / others

Some people think boys and girls should study separately at diffirent schools.

Перефразировать - обязательно! Нельзя брать целое предложение из темы, не переформулировав его.

there is a big gap between sex,

sexes?

this fulfill communication will help

не понял

with his family

his or her family (пишем так, не ущемляем женщин)

Неплохая работа!

[Chauysha]

Спасибо огромное!:) а на сколько оно баллов написано?